 Snoogans775
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Date: April 26, 2005 @ 12:15 AM
I like your composition, and you have a nice borderline tendency tripping around on every instrument, it's half-way between sloppy and soulful, but you still are making a good song here.
my biggest suggestion would be to slow down on the lead guitar, sometimes it seems like you have to squeeze in some speed if you're not too confident in your melody, but it's much better to take your time planning the best notes for each chord, the best notes to get between each of those, it'll actually give you more flexibility than if you're near-winging it,
but it does sound like you gave some nice thought to this.
I like the drum beat, it's very laid back.
I think you should check the chord voicing on that C you play 3rd in line on the progression, maybe a suspended 4th to move to that chromatic jazz resolution.
you do have a feel for jazz though, but more of a tutor based high school jazz band sort of approach, a lot of this is fairly original though, so that's more than commendable in a jazzy effort.
nah, this is more than an effort, this is a full blown song, good job.
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 koiulpoi
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Date: May 8, 2005 @ 6:28 PM
Halfway reminds me of the beatles. I do like that chord progression. You know what you need to do - get with a bunch of other people and make a complete band. You've got talent to be able to do something.
Although, once or twice your soloing went a bit too far off the scale for me, but it's nice.
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 onewhodreams
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Date: May 24, 2005 @ 10:47 AM
I agree with Snoogans about the note-planning compared to winging it  , especially in Jazz.
I like the groove and I know you can definitely play  
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 Bluenevus
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Date: May 7, 2006 @ 10:30 PM
I'm always a bit partial to jazz so keep it up brother...
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 AMGram
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Date: May 9, 2006 @ 2:42 PM
Your tone is a little muddy here and your lead playing could benefit from Snoogans's comment. However I love the drum track and your chord progression over it is effective. Jazz can be extremely complex but in this case keeping it simple helped your idea flow. Try jamming with other people if you can. This will help every aspect of your playing.
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2step-4eva
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Date: May 18, 2006 @ 5:45 PM
i really enjoyed this, although i agree it does get muddy in parts, theres some great parts in that solo, i like your style!
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soundview
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Date: May 19, 2006 @ 12:40 AM
interesting. The solo is ok, like some have said before you might want to think about your note planning a little bit. Otherwise the song itself is a nice little jazz number. Nothing special, but indeed trippy.
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